I never feel comfortable critting people on the net; I think often crits are such delicate things that even in person you can easily come off as assy (instead of legitimately constructively critical), and really with just text it's even more of a dicey thing.
And honestly half my problem would be summed up by 'STOP OBJECTIFYING SMART LADIES PLZ THX'.

It is amusing that Zappa's 'Fembot in a Wet T-Shirt' is playing right now.